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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In this day and age, more and more people try to discover various destinations and diverse types of food,while others are likely to continue doing something that is familiar to them. In my point of view, I advocate for the latter statement and this essay will discuss two aspects of this problem. First and foremost, travelling to many new refreshing places might help people change the boring atmosphere that they need to witness every day or some people yearn to taste a bunch of different cuisines all over the world.Even though change can bring a wide range of benefits to humans such as new knowledge, and new experience, it also involves some shortcomings.The adaptations and the embarrassment of the new life might be the pivotal causes that hinder people from stepping out of their comfort zones. For example, it takes time to pick up a new hobby or a new food. In addition, first time going visitors have to struggle with making acquaintances with strangers. Secondly, choosing to carry out the ongoing familiar tasks helps everyone become stably developed.Not only did a person have momentum on the way of solving a daily basic work but, he also is able to save time to learn new things again, which led to sustainable growth. Compare to the more adventurous counterpart, they seem more likely to change consistently in order to meet their desire for exploring new areas and new tastes. All in all, staying in an old traditional place could bring a lot of benefits.However, I totally agree with the idea that it is better to make a lot of effort to pursue the things that belong to you.

Good Point

In this day and age, more

开头交代了讨论的大致背景。

This opening establishes a general context for the discussion.

Suggestion

try to discover various destinations

意思可以理解，但 discover 在这里同时搭配目的地和食物不够自然。可改为 'explore new destinations and try different foods'。

The phrase is understandable, but 'discover' is not a natural shared verb for destinations and food here. For example: 'explore new destinations and try different foods'.

Suggestion

while others are likely to

逗号后应加空格：'food, while others are likely to'。这里用 while 表示对比是合适的。

Add a space after the comma: 'food, while others are likely to'. 'While' is already an appropriate contrast word here.

Suggestion

continue doing something

'Something that is familiar to them' 语法成立。明确具体活动会让论述更具体，例如 'returning to familiar places and eating their favourite foods'。

'Something that is familiar to them' is grammatical. Naming the activities would make the argument more specific, for example 'returning to familiar places and eating their favourite foods'.

Suggestion

In my point of view,

应使用 'In my opinion' 或 'From my point of view'；'In my point of view' 不是通常的表达。

Use 'In my opinion' or 'From my point of view'; 'In my point of view' is not the usual expression.

Suggestion

and this essay will discuss

这个预告下文的表达语法正确，但在立场句之后信息量不大。可以直接补充你偏好熟悉事物的理由。

This signposting phrase is grammatical but adds little after the position statement. You could state the reason for your preference instead.

Suggestion

two aspects of this problem

题目要求讨论两种态度，并未把它们定义为问题。用 'both attitudes' 更准确地对应题意。

The question asks about two attitudes, not necessarily a problem. 'Both attitudes' identifies the task more precisely.

Suggestion

the boring atmosphere

如果你指的是重复的日常生活，而非某个场所的气氛，'their monotonous daily routine' 会更准确。

If you mean repetitive daily life rather than the atmosphere of a particular place, use 'their monotonous daily routine'.

Suggestion

all over the world.Even though

这里已有句号，问题是句号后缺少空格，并非此处存在两个句子直接连写的语法问题。应写成 'world. Even though'。

There is already a full stop, so this is a missing-space issue, not a run-on sentence at this boundary. Write 'world. Even though'.

Good Point

a wide range of benefits

'A wide range of benefits' 是自然的搭配，清楚地引出多种可能的好处。

'A wide range of benefits' is a natural collocation that clearly introduces several possible advantages.

Suggestion

The adaptations and the embarrassment

这里要表达的是适应的需要和对尴尬的担忧。可将整句改为：'The need to adapt to unfamiliar situations and the fear of embarrassment may discourage people from stepping out of their comfort zones.'

The difficulty is having to adapt and the possibility of embarrassment. Recast the full sentence: 'The need to adapt to unfamiliar situations and the fear of embarrassment may discourage people from stepping out of their comfort zones.'

Suggestion

first time going visitors

首次到访某地的人可称为 'first-time visitors'，比 'first time going visitors' 更清楚自然。

Use 'first-time visitors' for people visiting somewhere for the first time. This is clearer than 'first time going visitors'.

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making acquaintances with strangers

意思可以理解。用 'getting to know unfamiliar people' 能更直接地表达结识陌生人的社交困难。

This is understandable. 'Getting to know unfamiliar people' would express the social difficulty more directly.

Suggestion

become stably developed

'Become stably developed' 不适合表达个人进步。如果你指的是提升已有技能，可用 'make steady progress in skills they already practise'。

'Become stably developed' is not a natural way to describe personal progress. If you mean improving existing skills, use 'make steady progress in skills they already practise'.

Suggestion

Not only did a person

倒装结构本身成立。问题是 did 为过去时，而此句讨论一般情况，后面又用了 is able。可用现在时并保持两部分平行：'Not only does a person become more efficient at familiar tasks, but they also save time.'

The inversion itself is valid. 'Did' is past tense, but this sentence discusses a general situation and later uses 'is able'. Use the present tense and parallel clauses: 'Not only does a person become more efficient at familiar tasks, but they also save time.'

Suggestion

which led to sustainable growth

可改为 'which can lead to steady progress'，与前文对一般情况的讨论一致，并说明具体是哪方面的进步。

Use 'which can lead to steady progress' to match the general present-time claim, and explain what kind of progress you mean.

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Compare to the more adventurous counterpart,

此处引导比较短语应使用分词 Compared，而不是动词 Compare：'Compared to their more adventurous counterparts,'。to the 并非错误搭配。另外需澄清后面的论点：为什么偏好熟悉事物的人反而更可能探索新事物？

Use the participle 'Compared', not the verb 'Compare', in this introductory phrase: 'Compared to their more adventurous counterparts,'. 'To the' is not prohibited. Also clarify the following claim: why would people who prefer familiarity be more likely to seek new experiences?

Suggestion

old traditional place

old 和 traditional 不等于熟悉。如果指一个人熟悉的环境，'a familiar environment' 更准确。

'Old' and 'traditional' do not necessarily mean familiar. If you mean a place someone knows well, 'a familiar environment' expresses that idea more precisely.

Suggestion

However, I totally agree with the idea that it is better

结尾含义模糊，无法确定你是否改变了偏好，不能直接判定为立场矛盾。应说明它如何支持引言中的立场。However 需要明确的转折关系，前面的句号后也应加空格。

The final claim is too vague to show whether your preference has changed; it is not a definite contradiction. Clarify how it supports the preference stated in the introduction. 'However' needs a clear contrast, and a space is needed after the preceding full stop.

Suggestion

the things that belong to you.

'The things that belong to you' 容易被理解为个人财物，没有清楚重申观点。如果仍偏好熟悉事物，可将最后的观点句改为 'I believe people benefit more from continuing to develop familiar interests and skills.'

'The things that belong to you' suggests possessions and does not clearly restate your opinion. If you still favour familiarity, rewrite the final claim as 'I believe people benefit more from continuing to develop familiar interests and skills.'

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Overall Band Score

Comprehensive Evaluation

Strengths

You discuss both attitudes and state a preference for familiarity in "I advocate for the latter statement". Relevant ideas include relief from routine, learning new things, adaptation difficulties and saving time.

Priorities

The preference becomes less clear later: the comparison with adventurous people appears to associate familiarity with seeking new experiences, and the conclusion refers vaguely to "the things that belong to you". Clarify these ideas instead of relying on more elaborate vocabulary.

Divide the single displayed paragraph into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion.
Develop one concrete example for each attitude and explain why it supports the argument.
Use a consistent present tense for general claims. The issue in "Not only did a person" is tense in context, not the inversion itself.

Practise rewriting one body paragraph with a clear claim, explanation and relevant example, then check that the conclusion restates the preference introduced at the start.

Task Response

You address both attitudes and initially favour familiar experiences. However, the later claim that these people are more likely to explore new areas and tastes needs clarification, and the conclusion does not clearly explain what "the things that belong to you" means. This makes the final position uncertain rather than proving that it has reversed.

The benefits of novelty are mentioned briefly before the discussion turns to its difficulties. Explain why someone might value unfamiliar places or foods, then develop the separate case for familiarity. For example, a hypothetical traveller could revisit a place they enjoy to reduce planning time. Explain how that supports your preference. Remove broad claims about "everyone" and explain what "sustainable growth" means in this context.

Coherence and Cohesion

The markers "First and foremost", "Secondly" and "All in all" indicate an intended progression, but the displayed response is one paragraph. Separate the introduction, the discussion of each attitude and the conclusion so the reader can follow the argument.

Within the discussion of novelty, the sentence beginning "First and foremost" joins several ideas loosely with "or"; split it and explain the relationship between travel and food examples. The comparison beginning "Compare to the more adventurous counterpart" also needs a clearer referent and a claim consistent with the preceding argument for familiarity. "However" at the end does not introduce an obvious contrast. Choose linking words for their meaning; existing phrases such as "All in all" are not inherently wrong.

Lexical Resource

"A wide range of benefits" and "stepping out of their comfort zones" are useful, natural expressions. Other choices are less precise: "become stably developed" and "the things that belong to you". Use specific wording such as "improve existing skills" and "continue familiar activities" where that matches your intended meaning.

"In my point of view" should be "From my point of view" or "In my opinion". "Pick up a new hobby or a new food" applies one verb to two incompatible objects: "take up a new hobby or try an unfamiliar dish" is clearer. Avoid replacing simple words automatically with longer ones; accuracy and natural collocations matter more than apparent complexity.

GrammaticalRangeand

Accuracy

You attempt a concessive clause with "Even though", a relative clause with "which led", and inversion with "Not only did". These show some structural range, but control is uneven.

"Not only did a person" is a valid past-tense inversion. Here, use "Not only does a person" for the general claim, and make the second clause parallel: "but they also save time". This is not a subject-verb agreement error in "did".
Use the participle "Compared" in "Compared to their more adventurous counterparts". The preposition "to" and the sequence "to the" are not inherently wrong.
For general consequences, "which can lead to steady progress" fits better than "which led".
"A daily basic work" incorrectly treats "work" as a singular count noun here. Use "routine work" or "daily tasks".
Add spaces after punctuation, including "world. Even though", and revise the misplaced comma in "but, he also".

Check one sentence at a time for tense, clause structure, noun form and punctuation before adding more complex constructions.